Comments : A fire lit show

  • 12 years ago

    by Tara Kay

    I am smiling from ear to ear, you wrote this piece marvellously, it was well done within the strict guidelines and flowed smoothly and captured the romance and imagery well too.

    I loved this piece so much...
    xxxx

  • 12 years ago

    by Darren

    Great little poem, like the concept of stars spelling romantic words. I guess you could look at a clear sky and make just about any word you would like to if you can see enough stars.
    That makes this poem believable.
    I like how flicker and lullabies work together.
    Great job.

  • 12 years ago

    by Hannah Lizette

    This is beautiful, chelsey! describes the perfect summer night. the first stanza is my favorite! stars spelling romantic words and the air has a fever... amazing. :) 5/5

  • 12 years ago

    by L

    What I love about this piece is the scene.
    It created a beautiful love place. The night and the sky, fireflies( lighting bugs) help to add a good imagery.

    It was tranquil and it relax me when I read it. 5/5
    I also loved the word choice. It's tough when we can only use certain number of words.
    It's even more tougher than counting syllables

    But you did it, well done.

  • 12 years ago

    by Ms Happiness

    I really loved it too, great job Chels:)
    And wooooohoooooo yes she did it, you did an awesome job:)

  • 12 years ago

    by Purple Rose

    This is a very beautiful poem, Chelsey :) I like how you used all of the words that were required for the club contest and the insects that you used :) I love lightning bugs...so pretty at night where you can actually see them...

    Beautiful poem.

    Excellent
    5/5

  • 12 years ago

    by Poet on the Piano

    This is so beautiful Chelsey, I loved how you had to write about an insect and include a season as well. It was very calming to read and your words flow into such a gorgeous scene, intimate between the two of you. Ebony is one of my favorite words, and I liked how you started the poem off with it to describe the night!

    Absolutely beautiful- I feel like you chose the images and words so carefully like they were fragile, enjoyed reading this poem of yours!

  • 12 years ago

    by Lioness

    Chelsey I remember reading this one and thought that the imagery was awesome. I loved reading it.

    We are in winter here in Australia so reading this poem kind of warmed me up which was nice!

    Awesome write
    x

  • 12 years ago

    by average thoughts

    U wrote d guidelines in an excellent way.
    And ya, lightning bugs r my fav too.
    Actualy,it reminded me of my childhood..and hw i used to catch them..beautiful.and lvd ,hw u related it to romance.

  • 12 years ago

    by Steven Croat

    This is an amizing poem!I love it's mood.
    Beautiful lines!
    Great!