More Than Just LOVE!!!

by Suceel Rose   Jun 14, 2012


My eyes might be just two,
among the million eyes,
that look for you.
My heart might be just one,
among the million hearts,
that beat for you.
But, these eyes
from thousand miles
sees you as something more than your beauty,
N' this heart
from thousand miles
feels you as something more than just love,
something more than just one girl.
I don't say I'm the best,
I know I'm not,
but I'm the one not leaving,
still living, always and ever
by your side.
N' all I ever want is to hold you till eternity,
till the red fluid of life flows in my veins.
So, please come to me,
hold these trembling hands,
N' bring it to the reality.
Sit beside this tormented soul,
look into these burning eyes,
let your eyes embrace with mine,
N' let them see together as one.
Kill this feeling of helplessness
N' infernal emptiness,
touch my thoughts,
feel my dreams,
light this forever night
N' shine for me so bright...!!!

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  • 12 years ago

    by Maple Tree

    This is such a beautiful love poem!

    I do have to say however, using the abbreviation "N" kind of takes the beauty away from this piece just a bit, however everyone has their own style and way of expressing their feelings so I want to applaud you for your originality!

    I want to say your first few lines:

    "My eyes might be just two,
    among the million eyes,
    that look for you. "

    What a beautiful and fresh way to start this piece off... love it!!

  • 12 years ago

    by LoveableKirsty

    OMG I am in tears this poem is SOOOOO GOOD!!!! I will hold your "trembling hands" and "look into your burning eyes' of passion and kill that "feeling of helplessness'!!!! LOVE IT SOOO MUCH!!!! Its now one of my Fav's!!! Keep it up buddy!!

  • 12 years ago

    by Illusion

    Brilliant! That's all I could say..

  • 12 years ago

    by LittleMermaid

    Wow,its so beautifully written..i loved every part of it.
    Just few suggestions..use 'and'itself rather than 'n'.i think that sound nice as all others are written in formal english..and on the stanza,These eyes...sees,correct it to 'see'..n typing mistake-infernal,i think u mean 'internal'..everythng else is so perfect..i give u 5/5 *_*

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