Hey, i saw that this was one ofyour older pieces, and (not that it's important but it's the reason I chose this one to read) your lowest score. It is really nice work, with nice flow to it, no worries there. But I was just wonderin about this one part:
and kiss her sensual lips.
i close my eyes and picture her here,
and enjoy the beautiful glimpse.
i get real lonely without her here,

It's like at first she was with you,andthan she dissappeared and you can only imagine her..? it's best to stick at one moment of time per poem, so if you want her to be with you in this poem ,than you can kiss her, if not, then only imagine the kiss you place upon her lips, don't say you did it. (i hope that wasnt worded to harshly) and I don't know if it was meant to be here, but I saw that you put 'without her here' twice, almost like a repeat in sentence. Sometimes this is a nice touch to a poem - but that's usually when you're meaning to set a rhythm and thought into place. Anyway, please don't take any of that in a bad way, it is only my opinion and you are free to disregard it all... Other than that though, I liked it and could connect with it really easily. Nice job! I'm off to see more :)

GOSH ALL YOUR POEMS ARE COOL NO FAIR

I love this . I really do . I disagree with steph about you messing up . Because if one would only look closely they would see that you said, " When I'm with her my mind is clear and everything is just a blur . I hold her closely in my arms and kiss her sensual lips . " So I know you're not speaken as if you're day dreaming, you're there . So keep up the good work . I love it .

Love Letty

Oh this ones awesome too
i love it its perfect!!!