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Deadly mascara << Now thats something I like .. Just from the start you created an image; a really dark one and with the percise use of words you painted a dark picture with those beautiful strokes of words ..

schizophrenic demons << this is another thing I also liked.. Demons are evil by default, but what do you make of schizophrenic demons? I mean I cant even imagine their other side. Perfect picture!

I, disguise my tortured soul with a smile << this is something I can relate to.. We walk around hiding whatever it is inside us with a smile, but why is that? So people cant see who we realky are? Or are we afraid to show others our weakness?

Awesome job hon :))

Awesome 5/5

Awesome 5/5

Andrea...

I am so used to your nature poems that this just blew me away...it was so dark and the imagery was eerily captivating...
some of the ways you described images were really powerful like

"Deadly Mascara" It sort of makes you think of the darkest b;lack mascara lining your eyes, as if you are saying you line your eyes with death...that is a deep image...WOW

And the ending, I just love because I can relate and it really brings out images that are just beyond amazing...

This dark poem is brilliant...
Nice to read something different...

Loved it!

xxx

I am speechless as well, this is fantastic! I am definitely adding this to my favs! :)

It looks like this may be the poem we were asked to write for the contest. I have to say that this is awesome!!! The images are dark and just so vivid and the words you've used are brilliant.

I think that you had changed the title from what it could have been and I have to say the title fits well into the poem.

Awesome write hun

x

Aahhhh syrup!!

I gotta side with tara on this one, we get so used to nature pieces from you when you sneak these dark little gems our way the effect is just devestating!!

Seriously i just stared at my screen for a few moments after reading this ooooo how i love your darkside, your control over language is nothing short of masterful, the flow of the piece and images were like out of some dark twsted fairytail.. damn you can write like no one else syrup simply fantastic!!!

Mascara, dark poems... In two poems that I have read, this sounds like a contest. Pretty awesome, I like reading this one. Everything was so smooth and the finally stroke me.. Another nightmare to choke on. I'm starting to like the use of mascara in more poems. This was really really good.

Wow.... The flow of this is beautiful... You are very good
Manda