Beautiful ..

Deserves the WIN! It's very visual and deep...I loved it!
5/5

The third line "wall, smoking opium" hit me pretty hard. I love it to the depths of love, but this work reminds me so much of my Hallway pomes. Keep up the amazing work!!

Such beauty in your writing. Well done

I love the rhythm you have created here and the way it worked so well to make your meaning really pop. Your style and form here are captivating, I really do love the way you put all the details together in this piece to have it take hold of the reader's mind so effortlessly. Far too many people can relate to this in a multitude of ways, but I'm sure none of them posses quite the skill needed to express it this stunningly.

So far, I've read this piece a dozen times and each time, even though it is a relatively simple read, I catch something I missed before or I find a new interpretation, so that was awesome! The depth to this piece is phenomenal and I am super glad I came across it.