Organic Place

by Yakari Gabriel   Jun 18, 2012


I wanted my writing to be pure today,
I wanted it to be innocent like a blooming flower
unfolding all her beauty, not knowing
that her life won't last too long

I wanted it to be humble,
like a wave that just dances with the
wind, but doesn't know how many heartbreaks
it has healed with the mere sight of its footsteps.

So I went old school,
no phone, no laptop.
just a pen and paper, the way I did
it back in the days..when I too was naive..

if only I could back to that,
that time when I just did what I did
without being beaten
and bullied by second thoughts,
nor regrets.. without aching
somewhere

because I can always
undress my writing,
I can take it back to simplicity,
and cheesy rhymes
take it back to being senseless and
and care free.

but not myself,
I can't bring myself
back to what I used to be

...I can never bring myself back.

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  • 12 years ago

    by Maple Tree

    When I write, I enter dream world... and now I dont want to leave from all the visions Ive created in my head while reading this piece... this is beautiful in so many ways...

  • 12 years ago

    by Steven Beesley

    Niccely written. There is nothing wrong with writing with pen and paper, I am of the old school and I love to compose my poems with pen and ink. I don't mean ball point pens either, I am very old school and love to write with fountain pens.

    This piece brings a bit of nostalgia back for me when reading it and it does set the atmosphere for the whole write which is great. I don't know why but images of Hemingway sprang into my mind when I was reading your write.

    Thanks for the entertaining read.

  • 12 years ago

    by Darren

    Good effort,
    Nothing wrong with a few cheesy rhymes!!
    My poetry is full of it.
    Every one of mine on here was written the pen and paper way. (which works if unlike me you have neat handwriting, otherwise trying to decipher what you have written a few days later is a right pain.)

    onto your poem sorry....

    if only I could back to that,
    that time when I just did what I did
    without being beaten
    and bullied by second thoughts,
    nor regrets.. without aching
    somewhere

    I like the emotion in this stanza the best, Bullied by seconds thoughts is a great term.

    I have just read it again... I like how the mood darkens as you read it. Starts off quite sure of themselves then seems to dwell at the end.

    Thanks for the read.

    Darren

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