Comments : So Where Does It Hurt? (Double Senryu).

  • 12 years ago

    by L

    Hehe, sorry.

    Okay, So this line has 6 syllables and it should have 5...

    Please help me get better.

    So my suggestion is to change "better" to "well"
    then it will have 5 syllables.

    • 12 years ago

      by Steven Beesley

      Thanks, I missed that. Today is not my day for writing. I completely rewrote the (Lai) poem as I forgot about the rhyme requirement (idiot that I am), hehehe =)