My way out

Gimme the blade
make it sharp
after everything is layed
you would know whatsapp
^^
Line 3: "layed" is spelt "laid"
line 4: I think "whatsapp" should be "what's up". It'd make the poem truly what it's meant you make it :)

looking into your ice cold eyes
you really can't careless
am gonna wash the pain off
who cares if i use my blood to do that
^^
Line 2: "Careless" is a term for not being "careful" saying "care less" would make it right
This is a passionate stanza. Very sad!

yeah i wear the smile
it's a mask i can't erase
who really is that happy kid i hear someone say
if only you know how wrong that statement is
^^^
My favourite stanza. "It's a mask I can't erase" beautifully written!

those lovely veins i wanna slit
yes my wrist i wanna split
after the blood spills
it's gonna be just what i need to stitch
^^
I can almost relate to this. I feel I want to do this. Very emotionally written!

i pass the thin blade through my hands
just as i promised
now you break down in tears
oh common it doesn't have to be so.
^^^
Line 4: "common" means it is easy to find it should be "come on"

Wonderfully written piece! I love the rhyme and passion in this poem. I feel like this sometimes. Alone. Until you cut yourself and someone tries to come to your rescue. But it's to late!
Well done 5/5

Gimme the blade
make it sharp
after everything is layed
you would know whatsapp
^^
Line 3: "layed" is spelt "laid"
line 4: I think "whatsapp" should be "what's up". It'd make the poem truly what it's meant you make it :)

looking into your ice cold eyes
you really can't careless
am gonna wash the pain off
who cares if i use my blood to do that
^^
Line 2: "Careless" is a term for not being "careful" saying "care less" would make it right
This is a passionate stanza. Very sad!

yeah i wear the smile
it's a mask i can't erase
who really is that happy kid i hear someone say
if only you know how wrong that statement is
^^^
My favourite stanza. "It's a mask I can't erase" beautifully written!

those lovely veins i wanna slit
yes my wrist i wanna split
after the blood spills
it's gonna be just what i need to stitch
^^
I can almost relate to this. I feel I want to do this. Very emotionally written!

i pass the thin blade through my hands
just as i promised
now you break down in tears
oh common it doesn't have to be so.
^^^
Line 4: "common" means it is easy to find it should be "come on"

Wonderfully written piece! I love the rhyme and passion in this poem. I feel like this sometimes. Alone. Until you cut yourself and someone tries to come to your rescue. But it's to late!
Well done 5/5

This is sad but very relatable

This piece is sad but i found it amazingly well written. I really liked the rhyming you put into this piece and the you kept the flow well with your good choice of words.

I kind of like the off-handedness of this poem. Even tho the subject is gastly, the rhyme and rhythm of the poem keep it merrily bouncing along.