Comments : Perfectly Crafted Doll

  • 12 years ago

    by Meena Krish

    As I read this I could picture a devil or some kind of "Chucky" doll sitting on your shoulder controlling your every action like whispering into your ear..and the strength is within you to fight it..there is a message within this write for every reader..good one!

  • 12 years ago

    by Purple Rose

    Typos: second stanza, first line, 'proping' is supposed to be 'propping.' Same stanza, fourth line, 'que' isn't and english word...you might have meant 'cue' or something else, I have no idea...also, I think 'sye' in the last word is supposed to be 'sigh.' Just trying to help, it is your choice if you want to change the words.

    When I first read this, it reminded me of the little angel/devil that sits on your shoulder telling what/what not to do :] Always thought that was kind of creepy for some reason.

    I like the message in this poem - never give up! Keep on fighting.

    Excellent
    5/5

    • 12 years ago

      by Matthew Anthony

      I will change! thank you for the comment... and que is... queue (is an english word) much love x

  • 12 years ago

    by Purple Rose

    Sorry! Double post D: