Comments : Those eyes

  • 12 years ago

    by Steven Croat

    Simple and nice!
    I liked it!

  • 12 years ago

    by Poet on the Piano

    Wow Yaki, the heartache here and inevitable feelings is so strong when I read this. I loved the dedication to this person, whose big brown eyes are constantly reminding you and constantly being in your memory. The end was so sweet and then a bit melancholy, when you know you could write a myriad of poems, but you go for just two. I thought the part about getting too involved and then crashing was really real for me, because there's truth in it, you go so far, so quick sometimes, that it just happens, you can't take things back or you can't know that your wishes will come true. But that still doesn't keep you from thinking of that person, dreaming of them. Because they still came into your life and affected you, maybe even changed your past feelings.

    Great write, as usual girl :]

  • 12 years ago

    by Paul Gondwe

    The simplicity of your words in this piece make it beautiful. Loved how you just let your emotions flow here, well written.

  • 12 years ago

    by nouriguess

    This is so sad and simple at the same time. I loved your previous piece about that person and now this... It's just heartbreaking to say the least.