I'm in love with this poem. The sadness is so deep and the metaphors just stand out. I love the first stanza about your knees failing and you not being able to stand tall. What an awesome metaphor.

I have felt like this so many times and I felt like you wrote it for me (even though I know you didn't) but the words make me feel even more connected to this poem. I absolutely LOVE IT.

I think that everyone has a weak side and sometimes without our control, it shows. Sometimes people prey on our weakness and know just how to break us. I think this poem is simply amazing.

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Your poetry here of late has really got me in a whirlwind of emotions sweet one! This poem has such an elegant sorrow and heartfelt agony of breathtaking words...Beautiful and tearful piece..

Meme,

Weakness is what makes us humans. I love weak people. Not 'over-emotional' people who cries over Titanic, but those who have hearts, if I can say. I am weak, every lover is weak, this whole world is weak, even nature. Sadness is life. Joy is nothing related to life. In my (humble) opinion, when we are down, we are capable of making miracles, of screaming out loud. And don't forget to remember that after every rainstorm, there emerges a rainbow. :)

Now to the poem: what a poem. I began to love simplicity ever since I began to read your poetry. It feels like I can relate to everything you add. Sadness? It is in here. Romance? It is in here. Vulnerablity? Oh dear. I feel like when you write, you don't 'try' to say something. You just say it. Which is the reason why I like your work.

Fillers don't really annoy me in your poetry, haha, I seriously know not why but...when I see a 'the', I think 'oh it makes perfect sense'!

'now I have to
stitch a pattern of
footsteps to where
you are.'

^

Must say, this part is what made this poem for me. 'Stitching' your way towards him is just awesome, and the way you said 'to where you are' makes me want to suggest something such as saying 'to wherever you are' so that it will sound like you lost him or something. But whatever, ignore me. This is perfect. I am just a nagging child. :P

Simple, sad and lovely.

Beautiful dose of sadness in the introduction...

wow

Now I have to
stitch a pattern of
footsteps to where
you are.

^^^That line made the entire poem for me, soooo creative...really great images in there...

I just realised Noura said exactly the same thing!!! Great minds think alike :)

You seriously wrote some mind blowing poetry here...

WOW WOW WOW

:)

This is the perfect defintion of very sad poetry,
Sho kenti 3m te7si w enti 3m tektbeya?
Meen mdeya2k hal 2de? Mana mesthle wlooo