by Steven Beesley Jun 25, 2012
category :
Dark, fantasy /
other
Prolific abstinence of any |
by Exostosis
A brilliant poem. The first stanza talks much about the terrible repercussions that would occur, when one does not think thoroughly over a decision. The unknown output, miscalculated end result could be devastating. |
I loved how you opened up with such brilliant images, like how no one on this ship can think purely, or even clearly, because it just isn't possible it seems. I thought the first stanza was a bit too wordy and needed a punctuation mark, I just thought the verbose images took away from the meaning. |