Comments : I Regret [Palindrome]

  • 12 years ago

    by Decayed

    Gosh, I tried so oooooooooooooooooooo hard to write a Palindrome... I couldn't by any means. !!!

    Now this is amazing! though I like the first part more than the reverse!!! but anyway, it's a brilliant attempt for a first try!

  • 12 years ago

    by Darren

    Well done for giving it a go, they are a right pain in the backside aren't they.
    I have written 5 palindromes by number 5 I started to write the backwards bit first. It makes it a little easier plus the forward bit always makes more sense and is the lasting impression.
    I like your take on this where the two stanzas reflect each other.
    regards

    Darren

  • 12 years ago

    by Steven Beesley

    Not at all an easy task to accomplish since you need to reverse the words in the end and they should still make sense.

    Well done.

  • Remembering with
    unfamiliar eyes,
    raging soul
    unlocked words,

    ^^ get the feeling that you're looking back at a memory but from a different point of view or rather perhaps an outsider's point of view..? Seeing you do things that were reckless/stupid and getting angry 'raging soul' at them now because you have matured/ changed..?

    I do regret
    ever making
    change.

    Unendurable life was..

    ^^ you regret your past.. Like you have stained it by trying to change what once was your present by rebelling against something or someone perhaps? Perhaps you felt claustrophobic or insignificant in your past 'unendurable life' - this made you rebel in the first place?

    ~Reality~

    ^^ now you've grown up/matured you offer a new insight..

    Was life unendurable?

    Change
    making ever
    regret. Do I?

    ^^asking yourself if you could have done differently - could have made fewer or no mistakes..?

    Words unlocked
    soul raging,
    eyes unfamiliar
    with remembering.

    ^^you hold that anger still but its directed at your past self and the mistakes you made.. Again reiterating how you have looked at the past from an unfamiliar point of view / as an outcast or such (for lack of a better word).. How you remember it and wished it were different.

    Overall, for a first attempt this is excellent in my opinion though I have not practiced the style myself. Its great to see writers branching out in styles from time to time.
    Also, though I am unsure of the exact interpretation - which I hope I am rigt, but cannot be sure - the content of this piece is excellent, well thought and totally relatable! Following on from my interpretation - we make many mistakes in life as we grow up and we just have to learn to deal with them as we grow older - fact of life unfortunately. I particularly liked how yoh started with the point of view from say an outsider and followed with new sight reality. Achieved this affect well.

    5/5