Yaki, this made my night to read this....there was just something that sparked when I read this. It was full of so many clever metaphors and brilliant phrases that make me think they are definitely more than words. It's like these thoughts of yours are unfolding themselves, and I'm seeing their true intention.

In the first stanza, it was a real eye-catcher, comparing someone to the end of the week, but somehow caught between those two weekdays. It was interesting because I wasn't expecting the anxiety and torture part, but when I think about it, that's how I feel during those days. Sure, after Friday there seems to be no worry, unless you're bound to a certain duty during the weekend. But between Thursday and Friday, you hear talk of the weekend and you can't help but long for it.

I thought it was beautifully romantic and a bit mystic to call this person "moon". Not resembling the moon but just "moon". Also how you find them to not be original or unique, but that they are beautiful whether hidden behind clouds or in full view.

The end was a twist to me, like as if you just aren't complete watching this person, or being with them?

Because I'd say the moon is definitely captivating, but you have me pondering, what if it's not? What if something's missing?

Wow the ending left me speechless. I liked how you wrote about this American tourist, only traveling to see the beach and the moon, but not seemingly familiar at all, not in their homeland. Hmm..not sure if I know exactly what it's about, because some of the feelings are vague, like you still hang around this person just to see them, but a deeper part of you is not satisfied.

Really intriguing write, I loved this Yaki and it was incredibly uplifting to read! The best part was you left some parts vague, you put your feelings out there but didn't describe it all, kind of left the scene to the reader, only speaking of how you currently are with this person.

Your poetry is just so smooth, with few words you put a new kind of sense here to me, one that's completely unique!

Good job :]

Oh, wow I guess I didn't understand a lot of it, thank you for telling me more. That's awfully sad, having someone there for just so long, and knowing that too? That you have to share. Wow, that seems like a brave heart to me still, and like you said to live life to the fullest. There was tons of emotions throughout the poem and even between the lines, then, I mean, it grabs the reader!

Ahh, sorry about the struggle, but you penned your emotions well if poetry was what you needed to do that!

Your calls? :-/

Hahahah. waw please I put "did you get my calls babe"?" in the praise comment thingy..I thought. so who ever moderator got it would cringe.. but it showed like a comment instead cause I pressed reply instead of praise. damn it. I ruined my joke...

ugh noggets.

Haha lol! That could have worked too :] It would have confused them as much as me. Shoot!

What would you think,
if I told you that I find
that you're something
between a Thursday
and a Friday night,
you're that feeling
people get when the
week is ending.

^^is this feeling happiness or anticipation? Its an expression I hav never heard before but I certainly like it! I great start, although I am unsure what you are talking about exactly - to or about a persob perhaps? Also, I am a little unsure about the second and third lines - 'if I told you that I find.. That you are something' - the two 'that's just dont seem to work, they ruin the flow a bit.. Other than that minor thing.. It flows smooth and is worded well.

a mixture of
anxiety, and torture.

^^ ah.. The emotions between 'thursday and friday'?
I am just a litle unsure how this emotion could be torture as people tend to wait all week for the weekend to arrive and generally enjoy it but I suppose this is different for everyone.. Also.. In relation to the person (?) you arw writing .. They have obviously brought you sadness and pain to feel like such..

if I was ever asked
to describe you in one word.
I wouldn't call you "unique"..

^^ there could be many meanings for this..
Firstly, this person could be just an 'average joe type folk'..
Second, this person could follow the crowd - like a clone
Third, this person could be no different from perhaps another you have encountered..
Fourthly, this person tries to act new and exciting constantly changing, but constantly failing..
And many more of completely less relation..
Its quite a clever little stanza, makes the reader think.

but I'd call you "moon"

^^ i dont think you are actually talking about the real moon - I dont get that impression anyway, but I could be wrong...

because, you're beautiful
in all aspects. in all circumstances
whether you have the clouds
in front of you, or behind you.

^^then this stanza turna my previous ideas on their heads completely!! - are you talking about the moon? That is what I imagine from this stanza - and now I am a little confused, which may be my own doing... Hmmm

you're beautiful when
you don't show yourself,
when you hide, and when you're full

^^ this could be talking about the moon, but also a million other glorious things! Including a heart, mind or soul perhaps..? Or even an emotion like jealousy or something.. Hmm again.

..I melt when I see you,
I'm uplifted, relieved, and inspired.

^^ This could be talking about a person you love (perhaps even a love unrequitted).. But also the moon.
Perhaps even a poem or simply words or a photograph.. There are currently a hundred thoughts swirling through my mind about what this poem actually entails. You really make the reader think! Or is that just me..?

but, your presence is never
enough for me to captivate you,

^^ the person theory - unrequitted love, this person is your everything i guess but they do not feel the same way, perhaps dont even know you exist..?

and I'm left sitting,
like an American tourist, on
an Arubian beach..enjoying
the sunset only because
it means that ;

...you're right around the corner.

^^now could it be a place or a person still. This has such pronounced yet simple images created withs a few words.

Overall, I am a little baffled about what you have written about - I really do think you have written about a person or to a person but I am quite unsure.
Other than the confusing, thought provoking content of the poem..
This is truly an amazing piece. It flows quite nicely and has such a tranquil feel to it.

5/5