Typos: I believe in the second line 'Thw' is supposed to be 'The.'

I would add 'Can you' or something like that at the beginning of the poem - it would just make it people understand it better. I would also at 'you' in between 'Can' and 'see.' However, that is just my opinion.

I really like this poem, Alisha. To tell you the truth, I think people who have succeed in doing this deserve this. They have right to feel happy at what they accomplish, I just wish that I could do something like that :]

Excellent
5/5

This is definitely an excellent read for those who have accomplished whatever significant thing in their lives. its like a public commemoration for those that have earned it, and i think anyone can get behind that. overall i thoroughly enjoyed it though it could maybe tolerate a once over again for fine tuning. nothing sticks out in particular, but i feel as though its potential hasnt been fully reached if that makes sense. overall though, 5/5