Tatouage (Nonet)

by Meme   Jun 27, 2012


If I can be that tattoo on your
chest carrying me so close to
your heart. I would easily
close my eyes and listen
to your heartbeats for
they are written
lullabies
just for
me.

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© Copyright 2012 by: gIrL
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  • 12 years ago

    by nouriguess

    Yesss. Now it looks just beautiful! :D

    • 12 years ago

      by Meme

      Thanks to your suggestion :-*

  • 12 years ago

    by nouriguess

    Yeah, you are totally right, I agree, titles are the hardest part of the poem. Well, I won't suggest certain titles unless you want me to. But I would just keep it a one-word kind of titles. :) Best of luck with that, haha! :P

  • 12 years ago

    by nouriguess

    I have no idea why I forgot to comment on this. I love Nonets. I love them.

    Being a tattoo on someone's chest has a lot to do with you being missing him, wanting to be omnipresent in their life. Maybe a part of their bodies and flesh too? I found that to be incredibly sensual and ethereal at the same time.

    The title I dislike it so much since it's really not eye-catching and too telling. You always should use titles that won't give but a little hint to what the piece is all about. But here I feel you said everything in the title and I don't like that. Honestly.

    With that being said, I love how you ended this with 'me'. How gentle that sounded. You nailed the syll. and I like how you managed to keep it simple. I bet you chose this form to say what you want to say directly, right? So in yo face. ;)

    Keep writing, beautiful lady. I enjoy your head. Haha. :)

    • 12 years ago

      by Meme

      I totally agree with you on the Title thingy, but I couldnt find any other thing to title it with. So if you have something in mind, any suggestion is welcomed :-)

  • 12 years ago

    by Boy

    Very beautifully and neat writing. flow is excellent. and the nonet it makes your words more powerful. i like the concept about the tatoo. and specially when it is placed on chest. because of heartbeat. very amazing feelings..
    lovely poem... it should place under love poem types. does not matter if it is nonet.. why did you not post it there....?

  • 12 years ago

    by Decayed

    Aywayy Meme!!! I think I might try this form cz I like it so much!

    And it really didn't feel like a formed piece because it is so very unrestricted and the flow is just.... amazing.

    HIGH FIVE

    • 12 years ago

      by Meme

      Thanks Abed. Once you try it tell me, ok?
      :-)