Wow! I thought this poem was really really good. The whole idea you used of a relationship being built on sand really conveys how u wanted it to. I thought that was a great thing to use b/c it makes the emotion in it deeper and I absolutely loved this. The flow was perfect, rhyming was well, and also the whole overall poem was great! :) that's my honest opinion. :p. Also, u broke the writing funk all of us have been in. Lol

You write beautifully and your interpretation of love is wonderful to read xx

This was great. :) Really enjoyed your emotion expressed throught with all the different metaphors. Nice write. :)