Childhood

by Aram S Hatem   Jul 1, 2012


In my childhood, Lotus grew up 'midst my
throat fast that even the Spring of our
neighborhood no longer feared to belie
the bitterness hidden in its flowers.

The sun's always stared, clueless, whenever
my grandpas dark eyes swallowed an eclipse-
at night, stars mimicked the hamlet river
and drank their raw gold off his tired lips.

He convinced me that in the afternoon,
a fairy would emerge through my eyelids.
He was sure that each sunray, once she croons,
would break into a thousand pyramids.

In my childhood, I knew no dawn or night.
No moon and sun rotated to wake up.
I never learnt how horses rode the light
nor how they besieged the space in a cup.

I only used to write down my daydreams
waiting in bed for the wood nymph to gleam.

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  • 12 years ago

    by nouriguess

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    by nouriguess

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  • 12 years ago

    by Purple Rose

    Welcome to PnQ, Aram.

    This poem is so beautiful that I failed to find it funny :) I don't think it belongs here (in this section), but maybe I am reading it wrong? Maybe there is a deeper meaning to it that I am not understanding.

    Typos: second stanza, first line, I believe that 'sun's' needs to be changed to 'sun has' because there is no possessive with 'sun's' and if you did use it to omit 'is' it doesn't really make sense for that either.

    Also I have a suggestion. Second line of the first stanza, I think that it would sound better with 'so' inserted between 'throat' and 'fast.' These two things should not interrupt the flow - it would make it go a little smoother I think. However, this is your poem, and I am just giving my suggestion...you don't have to do any of this whatsoever :)

    Anyway, welcome to PnQ (again). I hope that you have fun here. Sorry I couldn't get to this yesterday.

    Excellent
    5/5

  • 12 years ago

    by ronel mccarthy

    Great poem......love the structure and substance.....well done :)

  • 12 years ago

    by nouriguess

    Because I edited the whole poem for her and she never gave me credit.

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