I was a little confused by this poem. The way I read it it appears the man is pulling in the moon for his girl to feel up! lol. Although I am not sure that was your intention. That said the first four lines I understand but after that is where miscommunication is off. I like the rhyming you do in this ( and I'm not a rhyming gal!) Work on what it is you are trying to say and edit, edit and edit again. I didn't edit my poems for such a long time. I thought if my words were put on paper from God they were sacred. I no longer look at it that way. I write everything I want to say in longhand and then I start taking out anything that is not supporting the poem, anything that makes it too wordy and anything that is redundant. It also helps to read the poem aloud. I find alot of errors like that because speaking something forces you to listen to the flow of the words. I enjoyed the read.