Though this is shortish, it has tons of emotion, and thought. Some places were quite redundant, which sorta annoyed me, though the rest was well expressed. However the style was plain, the theme was bland, and the actual piece kinda seemed pointless. In my opinion this is not your best piece. I mean for purposes of venting or people in the same boat I can say it has done its job. But to entertain or tell a story or help learn something it doesn't pass the test. The word choice seemed way too ordinary and your voice wasn't as prominent as it seems to be normally.

Lovely poem, some really good lines. I felt that this kind of exposed how lost a mind can become during times of difficulties. 5/5

mandy :)

p.s. Thank you for the comment, it's always appreciated. I'll be sure to check out more of your work.

Tony, aside from the un-alluring shape and errors, I'm quite fond of your content. You have a vivid imagination :)

I like what you have done here, kinda freaked me out because I don't like the idea of dying, but that's just because I am scared of it.

The poem itself was quite unique. I love what you wrote here, love the rhyming.

For something that took you only a minute to write I thought was great. I think it is wonderful that you gave yourself the challenge!

Awesome

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