One Summer Daze

by ArtistrySoul   Jul 7, 2012


(Play)

I'll never hurt you
I just want to talk to you
No one can replace someone who is faithful,
an inspired fountain of magic petals

You are Beautiful,
Amazingly Pretty,
Super Cute!!
and wonderfully intelligent
I wanted to tell you how I feel
Unprivileged heart of mine,
if she doesn't feel the same

(Pause...)

(Play)

I want to see the world
AND
I hope it doesn't speak more beautiful than you

(continue playing...)

Only if you knew how serious I feel
To me you are,
Morning,
Noon,
and Night

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  • 11 years ago

    by ThebutterfliesMuse

    Wow. This has so much power to the imagery and wording. I love the last line of the first stanza. I love how you compare your love to a flower and they are full of beauty and color. Outstanding and unique. Greatwwrite. 5

  • 11 years ago

    by Autumn Leaves

    Wow, this poem is simply amazing. I like the way you penned this poem and how the words flow in melodic manner.

    Beautiful...5/5

    • 11 years ago

      by ArtistrySoul

      Thank you!!

      lol yeah it does differ to other writes that's why I like producing my poems to be unique =)

  • 11 years ago

    by The Queen of Spades

    What an interesting piece, I really loved it, although I felt the phrases "amazingly pretty, super cute!" didn't quite fit in with some of the poem's intensity, but I wouldn't say it detracted from the piece at all! 5/5

  • 12 years ago

    by Tara Kay

    I like how we were commanded to read it...withe pauses and such, made me feel like I was pressing the pause button on a cd player or something...
    pretty smart mate
    xxxx

    • 12 years ago

      by ArtistrySoul

      Thank you!! =]

      And yes that was my perception of the poem to make you feel as tho you were playing and pausing like you would on a cd player but not make you think its a song.

  • 12 years ago

    by Yakori bint Muhammed

    This is so amazing. I was thinking whether its a song but quiet short for one. However, i love how you defined your love to this angel. You described her beautifully that we knew a bit of her through your praises. I so much loved this line; 'an inspired fountain of magic petals'. Great metaphor. It added that unique touch in saying more about this girl you love. The poem has such a flow, so smooth like a song. You engage the reader, i wanted to hear more of this beauty. Nonetheless, its a satisfying read, i loved it. Kudos! :-} ..

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