Comments : One Summer Daze

  • 12 years ago

    by Innocent Fairy

    Wow i don't think i understood how this was written but wow i loved it and the wording,,amazing :) great job 5/5

  • 12 years ago

    by ArtistrySoul

    :P Thank you!! so much for your comment. I did alter it slightly as there were a few grammar adjustments needed but I'm glad you liked it

  • 12 years ago

    by BlueJay

    I really enjoyed the way this piece was written, the style was interesting and the flow was so smooth. The idea behind the style is quite unusual but really quite wonderful. Also the word choice was perfect for being so simple.

    All in all great piece

  • 12 years ago

    by Ms Happiness

    Awww I hope she holds for you the same feeling. Your pieces are different in their own way. Great job, also loved it, great job:)

    • 12 years ago

      by ArtistrySoul

      :) Thank you!!! i try making the poem different in terms of the way readers go about it, even tho it might be difficult to understand what i was trying to covey (if that makes sense lol)

  • 12 years ago

    by Burning Angel

    Wow, the wording here was terrific. I love it

  • 12 years ago

    by Wild flower

    The idea of this poem is a biGt weird, but I love it.

    • 12 years ago

      by ArtistrySoul

      Thank you!! it is supposed to be unusual but its also meant to be different and unique to other poems that's why it stands out :)

      NOTE: I mean different in a good way not bad

  • 12 years ago

    by Wild flower

    It is different, thats why I like it. Cant wait till I read a new poem by you.:)

  • 12 years ago

    by Meme

    I really like the way you structured this poem.. With the playing and pausing .. Gave it an extra twist and I like it :-)

    Keep up the good writes

    xx

    • 12 years ago

      by ArtistrySoul

      :) Thank you!! i wanted to try something different and think a little bit more outside the box and no had done anything like this before so i went for it.

      I'm glad you liked the poem, much appreciated :]

  • 12 years ago

    by Baby Rainbow

    Well done for this new style, I have never seen it before and it is quite interesting. You done well.

  • 12 years ago

    by DeviousCharmer

    I didnt quite understand it. the way you wrote it reminds me of a song. its quite unique :)

    • 12 years ago

      by ArtistrySoul

      Thank you! :), yeah i wrote it as if the reader was reading it like a song but it was just the structure of the poem

  • 12 years ago

    by Yrem Crish

    You're so creative and you're poem is like a melody with nice rhythm...the girl is so lucky enough for dedicating this poem..I'm just wondering, did you composed it as a song? Wonderful piece.
    5/5

    • 12 years ago

      by ArtistrySoul

      I didn't compose it as a song, I just used the structure so it looks like it was composed as a song but it was actually meant as a poem, hope that makes sense lol

      And Thank you! I appreciate your comment :)

  • 12 years ago

    by rock serenade

    A wonderfull piece ... soo lovely liked it :)
    5/5

    • 12 years ago

      by ArtistrySoul

      Thanks!! its different but that's what makes it unique :)

  • 12 years ago

    by Yakori bint Muhammed

    This is so amazing. I was thinking whether its a song but quiet short for one. However, i love how you defined your love to this angel. You described her beautifully that we knew a bit of her through your praises. I so much loved this line; 'an inspired fountain of magic petals'. Great metaphor. It added that unique touch in saying more about this girl you love. The poem has such a flow, so smooth like a song. You engage the reader, i wanted to hear more of this beauty. Nonetheless, its a satisfying read, i loved it. Kudos! :-} ..

  • 12 years ago

    by Tara Kay

    I like how we were commanded to read it...withe pauses and such, made me feel like I was pressing the pause button on a cd player or something...
    pretty smart mate
    xxxx

    • 12 years ago

      by ArtistrySoul

      Thank you!! =]

      And yes that was my perception of the poem to make you feel as tho you were playing and pausing like you would on a cd player but not make you think its a song.

  • 11 years ago

    by The Queen of Spades

    What an interesting piece, I really loved it, although I felt the phrases "amazingly pretty, super cute!" didn't quite fit in with some of the poem's intensity, but I wouldn't say it detracted from the piece at all! 5/5

  • 11 years ago

    by Autumn Leaves

    Wow, this poem is simply amazing. I like the way you penned this poem and how the words flow in melodic manner.

    Beautiful...5/5

    • 11 years ago

      by ArtistrySoul

      Thank you!!

      lol yeah it does differ to other writes that's why I like producing my poems to be unique =)

  • 11 years ago

    by ThebutterfliesMuse

    Wow. This has so much power to the imagery and wording. I love the last line of the first stanza. I love how you compare your love to a flower and they are full of beauty and color. Outstanding and unique. Greatwwrite. 5