The space between

by Jenni   Jul 11, 2012


You always said,
that painted fingernails
are disingenuous
while biting your own
because you knew
most facts cannot be hidden
underneath nail polish.

And whenever you try
to introduce me to your
best friend, he is not there.
"This is reclusion", you'd say.

Once reality strikes again
your voice becomes familiar
though words are distraught:

"Isn't it funny how my bike
is the only intact thing
I have in my life?"

A pondering silence clasps;

we need bridges between us,
without fees or custom checks,
but trust, openness and respect.
Bridges, that are walked upon
instead of lived under.

You've been watching me,

but I now realize, that if
lopsided smiles exist,
yours is the most beautiful.

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  • 12 years ago

    by Marvellous

    Agreement, is bridge to doubt sea. Keeping up, calls for agreement.

  • 12 years ago

    by Xanthe

    The language you used here was so refreshing. I love how you tied in different and quite random images that we don't often see used - nail polish, bike, bridges, smiles - but they worked in a very unique way.

    I like the idea of hiding the truth beneath nail polish, then how 'he' didn't like it. I think the relationship you created between the characters was very intriguing. They were, in a way, opposite.

    To me, the 'best friend' part hinted a bit of dishonesty, and perhaps a rift between them; a quarrel.?

    I found the dialogues very interesting. This poem - whilst reading it, I imagined this was all a recollection. The dialogues are all by this person ('you').

    "Isn't it funny how my bike
    is the only intact thing
    I have in my life?"
    ^
    I interpreted that this 'bike' represents his childhood. Interesting..

    The ending was very creative. It made me imagine a 'space between' the characters. The bridge is something they're planning to build, like it's just the beginning of their relationship.
    Beautiful piece, Jenni. I'm sorry I only commented now, but I always read your work. Keep writing :)

  • 12 years ago

    by Hellon

    I don't know if I'm even going to scratch the surface behind the meaning of this poem but...I'll give it a go anyway. My feeling is (and please forgive me if I'm so very wrong) this is about someone with the early signs of Alzheimer's or some other illness associated with the elderly? Just a few words that you placed within this verse gave me this impression.

    It's a very deep poem regardless if I've got my interpretation wrong and...I did enjoy reading it....made me think!

  • 12 years ago

    by Tara Kay

    I know I don't comment as much as I should, but I do read your poems and always feel connected to them and find them brilliantly mesmerizing.

    This is no exception, It was sort of really strong in a way and understanding of the way people are here is awesome...

    Jenni, you little superstar, loved this, love you

    Hugs tight

    :)

  • 12 years ago

    by Lioness

    Jenni I always love reading your pieces because your talent really shines through them.

    I loved reading this one. Oh the first stanza was brilliant, the way you opened up. Someone hiding the truth underneath painted nails and then someone else biting them because they believe the truth will come out sooner or later.

    A VERY enjoyable poem to read hun

    LOVED IT

    x

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