Comments : Tears and Blood

  • 12 years ago

    by L

    I'm speechless for the shape of the poem.
    It looks like hearts going inside one another.

    5/5

  • 12 years ago

    by Dagmar Wilson

    Beautiful write

  • 12 years ago

    by Lioness

    I love the shape too!!! But for me I saw them as tears. Endless running of them, and they were getting more heavy.

    Great images in this piece!

    x

    • 12 years ago

      by Khalid M Darwish

      Thanks a lot! The more you go down the heavier woul be tears and the higher would be the price! Oh My God! You have just guided me to a new quote, haven't you?
      I guess you got my point! Thank you for the kind passing.

  • 12 years ago

    by X Harlea X

    Beautifully written, extreme emotions was put forth in this and it takes for of a shape that I cannot exactly place but it is a beautiful piece. Good job ((5))
    ~Harlea

  • 12 years ago

    by Dark Secrets

    I can relate to this poem on many levels, and I think it applies to all relationships. It also has an air of religiousness around it, meaning it can also mean a spiritual relationship. Your metaphors are wonderful and appropriate. I like the line where you explain how you are a river amidst a wound... very expressive.

    "means many things,
    things you couldn't to stop"

    ^ 2 grammatical mistakes here though. "means" should be "mean" and "to" shouldn't be there.

    But overall, this has been a pleasure to read. :)