"and I've never ever seen a moon walks on the ground"
^ This line sounds weird to me. I think it would sound better if it was "and I've never seen a moon walk on the ground" Removing the ever and the 's' from walks makes it flow smoother, however that's my opinion.

"and I have never ever known any creature having two lives"
^Again, I think the ever needs to be removed... I don't know if you wanted them placed there for it to flow somehow, but I think it throws it off...it may just be me?

"You're a unique different sky that is not emulated by all skies"
^I think this line doesn't need "different" because unique already means that it is different.

"You're the first drop of life rain falling from grace clouds"
^I really love this line.

"You're the best grace 'f beauty God's gifted me"
^was the 'f meant to be "of"??

"You're the first atom of hope I've felt "
^This is another great line I love.

Overall, this is a nice piece. If you want to make those changes, I think it could be better. I don't want to offend you, just trying to help. :)

My friend I liked your advice so much and you're right for all points you just mentioned. Maybe I can consult you every time if you don't mind. Thank you for the sweet passing.