Tree Falling (Nonet)

This is really nice. I enjoy Nonets as they're visually pleasing and provide a simple challenge to the writer. I enjoy the little story you've crafted here but

'falling from your tightly grasp,
feeling rejected pain-'

the first line there actually doesn't make syntactical sense, it and 'feeling rejected pain' is really abstract for such a short, concrete and almost relatable effort.

Nice poem, though.

Thank you for sharing this, I have never heard of this form before.

I thought it waa cleverly done in the way you have wrote this to be interpretated in which ever way the reader takes on.

I, saw the abuse aspect of it. And the denial that it is the abusers fault as victims often blame themselves.

Nice work.

A very nice form, I will have to try it. :)

I think this poem can be interpreted two ways, the first which is clear - falling from a tree and then the other which is abuse. I think you meant it with the tree falling but it could have deeper meaning for you, either way it works nicely.

When we fall, it is true that we sometimes blame others when really it is our own fault. You captured that here very well.

Another great write.

I feel upset by the images of the bruises and broken nose. I don't know the image when I read this poem makes me think of people who are being abused by their loved ones (who are blaming themselves and think it's their fault) or that they deserved it.

I loved the write hun, you did a wonderful job with the form.

Awesome

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Andrea, love this. Nonet's work really well to give a meaning...for the shortness is powerful.

I like the message here that tells you to take your wrongs and admit them and not blame others for your mistake.

Great piece...
love

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