I like this poem!
(and it rhymes, as all real poems do!)

Joseph, this is good without doubt. Put visions straight into my mind and I so thank you for writing this piece. It is beautiful..

Wow fantastic, great write and really greatly written and i love the interesting twist or history and It's deep an dark,,,I really enjoyed reading this poem, It's even got great wording 5/5

The rhymings is incredible. it flows nicely. i like this poem. it was different and in my world different is a good thing :)

Amazing piece, right up my alley
Very descriptive and the ryhme scheme was good. the imagry was very good but i had to read it a couple of times. (mainly because of the big words lol)
As soon as i got it i loved it
keep writing like this sir!

"To only find yourself upon a very deep valley
Where pain and sorrow is its graving finale"

was my fav part. Du to personal preference
5/5 from me

Very good poem, i liked it so much i read it twice to myself the had to read it outloud. I love how descriptive and dark it is, painting a picture with words. Great job :)

Very good poem, i liked it so much i read it twice to myself the had to read it outloud. I love how descriptive and dark it is, painting a picture with words. Great job :)

Such a great poem, I love the dark imagery I was to come up with in my mind and like the previous few have said the flow and rhyme is quite good.

"Food is scarce and worms are cheap
A place ur eyes would tear,voice mute and your heart leap" ,would my favorite part because I love endings and I believe you ended the poem on a great note.

I thought I left my comment on this poem before but it seems that I didn't...

Okay, I like the story and how you painted it to us readers. I did have to read it a couple of times but thats because of the vocables that were used in this piece. Which is good, I like them. I also like the rhymes, I find doing rhymes to be tough but you did good with them, specially since you are rhyming in longer lines, pretty cool.

5/5