Another poem worth commenting. Great job keep up the good work!

Janis,
I swear this must be your best poem to date. I love the imagery and sad atmosphere you have created. You emotions pour forth effortlessly and honestly
in a raw and real way. You have done well my friend!

Janis, this great. It reads so effortlessly. Fantastic imagery, great first and secondary rhyming, love the emotion and despair.

I really loved this poem... I love the touch of sadness and the imagery of sadness you have drawn throughout... the personifications of abstract elements is justified and I loved the tone of this piece... The content is just so filled with gloominess...
Overall A beautiful piece of art(:

Good rhyming, nothing forced here!

Good story as well, could really sense your torment as the she-devil won you over and left you bereft of yours senses.

Well done!

5/5 Ingrid

I've read many pieces on silence and darkness, the moment of alone and how bitter cold it can feel, but I have to say.. this piece here, had me take a new thought process for sure... Loved the lines you crafted... despair kissing- vortex of thoughts... Mercy I love this piece by you... !!