Comments : I Want the Sun

  • 12 years ago

    by Blood of a Lion

    An old thing that I wrote felt like it fit for our day.

  • 12 years ago

    by L

    Leaving us to think of nothing but pain and distressing,

    ^ I think it should be distress since pain is a noun and distressing would be a verb?
    so there needs to be some parallelism .. I believe that's what they call it.

    I think you love the word musing.
    This piece is pretty good. I like how you write.

    • 12 years ago

      by Blood of a Lion

      And yes I do like the word musing xD I just love how it sounds.