I really love this write Meme :-)you always always always just smash the granny out of it lol :-)

Wonderful xx

Aww love it! I love the title - it instantly caught my eye.

I love the start of the poem, and how you wrote "when you reflected the melancholy colors of my eyes" >> that was a beautiful expressive description.

I like the idea that you can only breathe when you're hugging this person... it shows how important this person is to you and how you need them to live.

Great poem! :)

Meme, I am angry. I wrote a very long comment and it signed me out. :( How many times will this happen to me again till I learn to copy my comment!? And I didn't have enough marks to be qualified to study medicine. I was 3 or 4 marks away. This is not my luck day. I assure ya.

So, I said somewhere in my comment that if you just try to read the poem again now and focus on those little lovely expressions you have ere and there, and try to connect them to each other all throughout the poem till the end, it will flow much, much better and the meaning will be completely different.

For example, the Septembers bit, I loved it bt...found no connecton between it and the whole poem. Maybe that's ust me and my bitter attitude or because I don't know the rules of your club contest, still I would love to see you consideing this.

Also:

'melancholy' should be 'melancholic'. It was an adjective there.

Lovely piece, Miss M. You're just getting brighter!

I like this poem and I thought that the description that you gave could be useful, yet I'm glad you didn't post it, since without it the reader can wonder what this poem is about.. That's why I also liked it that you placed it under miscellaneous and not under love poems.

when I first read it, I thought it was a love poem, dedicated to someone and..., other than that, I really like this and the descriptions you gave.

By the way, I like the use of autumn in a poem, and for me to see it in your poem adds more for me to like it even more.

That is a lovely touch to a poem, making it so you.

Really nice poem.

Sorry its not much of a comment.

xx

Oh my!
This is simply put, beautiful!!!

I love the flow and the words you have used here, I feel a warmness in the poem. I wonder why you've put it in the miscellaneous though because I can feel such strong love coming from this piece.

Oh I love the ending too, simply brilliant!!!

You're amazing

x

Very nice. 4/5