Comments : Dual Construction

  • 12 years ago

    by Dagmar Wilson

    This is one interesting piece Thomas
    but so well written with honesty and
    emotions. If only we knew how many
    people go to their job on a daily basis
    and towards the end of the day, they have
    no where to go.

  • 12 years ago

    by Hannah Lizette

    Nice piece, Thomas.

    We put up a front sometimes, acting like everything is okay and trying to help others and do our job, etc... yet we can't fix ourselves, we are crumbling on the inside. Like the old saying goes "you cannot judge a book by it's cover" ... the outside may be pretty but the inside can be falling apart.

    You captured a lot of emotion and depth in this.

    Keep writing :)

  • 12 years ago

    by Chelsey

    People who know me and my writing can tell you I'm not a fan of rhyming poetry, however I've been liking your writes.

    So call me
    a builder of empires
    The enhancer
    of your inner desires

    ^ you always put in your stanzas that are always so interesting, so uniquely written that makes me really like the over all poem.

    Nicely done Thomas

  • 12 years ago

    by Lioness

    The rhyming was awesome, not forced, just flowed naturally. I love this piece!

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