Comments : Transmutation

  • 12 years ago

    by Sylvia

    OK, I finally got my take on your poem into words and on paper. Here they are.

    Our demeanors have no symmetry, they are fractured and it is common among men. The ills of the world could be the common structure and those ills assail each of us and influence the dismay we may feel with life in general.

  • 12 years ago

    by Meena Krish

    You have no idea how many times I have read and re-read this write! I also had to get help from the dictionary. But I think I got what you are saying: its like how the author feels with all the ill fated things that is currently going on around the world..its a complicated thing but its deep and it does make the reader think very deeply..

  • 12 years ago

    by TJ Arizona Eagle

    Great job bro. It's been a while. Nice to be reading your work again.
    Take care
    TJ

  • 12 years ago

    by Darren

    I love the thought of 'influence dismay'

    I also like have fractal and symmetry oppose each other in real life but you make them work together here.
    For 3 lines, this is awesome.

    very clever

  • 12 years ago

    by End Of Eternity

    Lot has been said within 3 lines & lot more could be explored within few words.
    Deep indeed.

    all the best and take care