A date with darkness (mini mono verse)

I love the style, I'd have to say I like reading your longer lines of poetry and how you weave a tale to tell, but the images are strong here. That sense of self-destruction and not being able to break free.

Wow, can't believe the power that comes from this when there are hardly any words! What an amazing write.

Your first stanza for me, reminded me of the nights I used to self harm when I was younger. i would wait til darkness to cut and this is what hit me when I read your words here.

Your second stanza was more of a trapped feeling, it could be from anything. Trapped in the depression or memories or anything which you can fit the emotion to.

Excellent job.

Another great write from an awesome poet :)

Mini mono... that is cool ;)

I like how chopped up it is,,,and due to its shortness in content and length, you get like flashes of alll dark images. cool

Very dark poem. I did not know what a mini mono verse was before I read this, so I had to look it up, of course.

The requirements were that you were supposed to have a rhyme scheme of aaaaa, and bbbbb while having 3 syllables per line. You did this expertly :]

Like Hannah said, in the first stanza the person obviously committed suicide. For the second, it seems like they were going to hell? Or at least somewhere where there isn't sunshine :S

I am going to have to try this form some time. I have never tried it before, because I am afraid of the restrictions.

Very good, Tony.

Excellent
5/5