Your writing has improved greatly, I like this Harlea.

I really enjoyed this poem. I thought it had an almost musical flow and a beautiful message.

Awesome this has "song" all over it!

i literally started to sing this as i began reading lol the addition of color in the piece was an epic move, your rhyme scheme was consistent throughout and your word choice was great!!

i like the size of the piece too, not too long and not to short, sometimes the rhymes can wear thin on a long piece ( i should know ive written enough of them lol) but you nailed it in this write.

really really loved it :-)