Thats a really good piece, and I think the title fits. I dunno thats just my opinion. Anyways, great job..

The title fits the purpose, bringing a
message accross. I know I can relate
well written Hannah

I was thinking "The hauntiness of a vivid nightmare"

But then I realized hauntiness is not a word..

So Haunted does fit the content.

I like the title but I think something like "The haunting" would be better. Just my opinion

Wow, powerful poem. I realted to this and the way you can be hurt by someone and the affects can last forver more with the memories. The thought of their eyes forever being with you is quite haunting on its own. From an abuse point of view, this sums up what it can feel like, you have penned it really well.

Great work.

I love the opening stanza; it's descriptive and sets the tone of this piece. The personification of trees is not that original anymore but making them 'screech' was a nice touch. I thought the capitalisation of beware was well-penned too as I don't see capitalisation often and when I do, it's not done properly. Here however, it is perfect.

You continued with personification with the second stanza and added a simile. There are a lot of imagery now but I thought you tied them so well together; they complimented each other, great job.
You don't need an apostrophe on 'its' though.

The third stanza is fast-paced, dynamic - and it works.
I suggest rephrasing though:
"Rapidly escaping into a forbidden cave,
I pray the storm will pass as quickly as it came.
Shining my flashlight ahead, I freeze in fear."

Not too keen on the next stanza. You could use a more powerful description than 'black, demon' as it is too vague for a piece like this.
I'm not too sure on 'drinking me in..'
'Had' shoupd be: has.
And I got confused with 'how did he find me?' Didn't the persona run to the cave?

The fifth stanza was okay, but you could change 'murky, slppery' to just one powerful adjective describing the walls. How were they slippery?
When writing a 'dark' poem, I advice you to refrain from using 'darkness, darken, darker, dark' and all unless it is necessary. What is this darkness?
And 'escape route'? The cave in my mind only has one entrance; where the persona entered - at least that's what the first stanzas made me think. She was running in the 'somber woods', 'escaped in the forbidden cave', then quickly saw 'him'. I thought the transition was too fast. You could add something in between to show that she was really trapped and she needed to devise an 'escape route'.

I kind of like the 'echo', but after that, the persona is already in her bed. She woke up too soon. I think you could really add more to show this horror, to show how 'haunting' and scary this 'nightmare' is.

I enjoyed reading this though. Overall, it's a well-written piece. Keep it up!

This was a really good write

The images you set were amazing very detailed and clear its like I was there the only thing I didn't like was tht I guessed it was a nightmare before hand which isn't your fault just wish I never guessed lol

5/5

This was a really good write

The images you set were amazing very detailed and clear its like I was there the only thing I didn't like was tht I guessed it was a nightmare before hand which isn't your fault just wish I never guessed lol

5/5

This piece is rather chilling isn't it?
It is such a powerful poem only strengthened by your flawless use of imagery. The eyes especially... you have really managed to broadcast to readers what you see/feel.

Well done!