by nouriguess
You have some really good lines! You just have to watch those un-capitalised 'i's. ;) |
by Aaron
Few spelling and grammar mistakes, but that doesn't really matter. Again this poem got to me as you express similar notions that people go through after heartbreak. |
by ArtistrySoul
I don't get the title hat goes with the poem, as you have categorized it under love poems oO |
by Unrequited
Very nice! It's a tough topic; conflicting feelings of this nature are not easy to sort out. Hopefully writing this helped. |
by Xionide
"Sad songs set on shuffle |
by Terry Hume
There are spelling errors but that is easily fixed. Its a very tormented poem. Clearly you are torn between taking him back. Personally I hope you didn't. That aside it was hard to read because it was so tormented. Watch your redundancy, used too often it sounds whiney and I'm certain that was not your intention. Keep writing and let that guy go you deserve better. |
by Darren
I love the flow to this, there is a great deal of sadness portrayed also. |
by Chevalier des Fleurs
Great job. You really explained how I've felt in the past, the torment of being pulled back and forth allowing the one you love take you piece by piece. You gripped the emotional rawness of love and all the crazy things we do when we are going mad, we just want to let go but can't. very well written. |