That was so sad and emotional. I love the rhymes! Well-done. :)

Beautifully emotional, I was able to connect very well with this piece as I've had "the end" happen to me weeks ago after two years; the few rhymes weren't a bad touch, I really enjoyed it.

I think did it with poem as well, it is a sad piece but you have it under love poems :S

I really liked this piece as it was more direct than your previous poems and also good use of words as well and i liked the way you constructed the last stanza :)

LOVE the ending! I tend to prefer short poems, seeing if people can pull off deep emotions in only a stanza or two. You did NOT disappoint.
The separating of the last few words really made an impact, that was a wonderful choice.
I'm glad I read this. :)

"Retreat into my shell
Hide the pain away
Try and save my tears
To cry another day"

This stanza sounds exactly how I used to get through each day. not a great way to live your life as you may well or not know.

All in all this was a very well written short poem.

What type of poetry is this? this is nicely written simple yet I can feel the emotion that your piece is trying to portray as a matter of fact it is what I'm currently feeling right now.

What type of poetry is this? this is nicely written simple yet I can feel the emotion that your piece is trying to portray as a matter of fact it is what I'm currently feeling right now.

I have been where you are now and no doubt I will revisit that place again unfortunately as we all will. Its a hard topic to discuss, harder to write about. I thought it emotionally charged and painfully true. I cannot find anything I would change ( and I read it 3 times). I do suggest you keep writing not just through the hard stuff but the everyday stuff as well. Try to find the poetry in all things.
Also since I am new could you please read a few of mine? I see alot of people visit but nobody rates or advises, that's really frustrating. Any that strike your fancy. Many thanks and I will visit you again. :)

Nice

This was well written, the rhymes really worked and they didn't sound force.

I was a bit uncertain in this :

"and fall apart again"

I think " falling apart again" will sound better..
Just a suggestion.

I have a hard time write rhymes but you did it with ease. The flow of the poem is really nice and the rhymes added a melody.

The ending with fear was also really good. Is this a type of form of poetry? if it is, it will be nice if you add a note at the end. If it's not, it doesn't matter this was well written.