Comments : Poem of My Thoughts

  • 12 years ago

    by Joseph Boadi

    I have experienced and been there.you really painted a very colourful picture.nice piece

  • 12 years ago

    by Krysten

    Wow i really like this one. Another great job.

    Rather I won't say I'm done caring but rather, I'm done sharing

    My favorite lines, as they express just what I'm feeling

    My only suggestion is maybe consider some rearanging of lines, only because when i read it outloud there where a few times when it didn't flow smoothly. But just my opinion. :)

    • 12 years ago

      by Aaron

      Where did you have those problems?

  • 12 years ago

    by nouriguess

    Meh. I am done caring too. Why do they act so selfishly? Good poem.

    • 12 years ago

      by Aaron

      But then they want so much from you, this why I can't stand the average person

  • 12 years ago

    by DeviousCharmer

    Loved it , kinda made me think of my ex bff

  • 12 years ago

    by L

    This poem is so raw, it gave me the impression that it was more like a vent ,however, it's still a poem and it's good. The emotion is felt. To be more precise, the first part of the poem felt like anger or rather disappointment and frustration combine all together.

    The second part sounds more sad specially because of the last lines, when nothing is the same without that someone. And that you have lost her..

    I'm done caring, many times I have say that but no matter how much I try, I keep failing at doing that.

  • 12 years ago

    by Yakori bint Muhammed

    Message is on point. Undiluted piece saying it all as it is. When you genuinely give in to it, you'll be taken for granted. When you don't, suspicions arise. How can one satisfy the other? Alot goes in before the real committment with the worthy one is a guarantee... Keep writing! :)