Comments : Filthy (Double Tetractys)

  • 12 years ago

    by Wild flower

    I really love how you wrote the first stanza, drinking someone guilt made it powerful.
    I really love your poetry, and this an awesome touching piece. Great job:)

  • 12 years ago

    by Jenni

    I do not know why, but the more forms I see the more I like them.. as long as they do not require rhyming haha :P
    I know that when I saw Chels' rules I felt a bit hopeless because I didn't know what to write about and was surprised as to how fast you came up with something as interesting as this one!

    The fact that even though the persona drinks the others persons guilt and the cup still overflowing shows that his/her conscience can't be working too well, as she still act certain ways that cause for her to feel guilty again, but yet the persona keeps taking it on herself and eventually "pollutes" herself with all that guilt.
    On one side people will start doubting the person due to all the mistakes occuring that she is supposedly to be blamed for and on the other side she gets really frustrated with that other person continueing with whatever he/she is doing.

    Obviously "sorry" will eventually lose its meaning like that.

    Great poem! :)

  • 12 years ago

    by Hannah Lizette

    When I read this in the club discussion, I fell in love with it. Drinking their guilt and I'm sorry tastes like mud. Ohh, so powerful. You never fail to amaze me with your writing!!! <3

  • 12 years ago

    by Baby Rainbow

    Good choice of style for these words, it works perfectly. The message in this is strong and I know for me I can relate. I think the best part of your words in this one is that the situation can really widely vary, it could be anyone's guilt and the realtionship can be really any type of relationship with this going on.

    Well done maple tree. x