Unexpected Romance

by Hannah Lizette   Aug 5, 2012


Darling,

We both know you are no Mr. Romantic,
but you sure surpassed your goal tonight.
The kindling flame flickers in your sultry eyes,
ecstasy climbing as we read each other's minds.

It's been too long since we've made love by candlelight,
so let's skip dinner and casual small talk,
pour ourselves a glass of red wine,
and dance our way into satin sheets.

*written for a club challenge

Copyright 2012: Hannah K.

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  • 12 years ago

    by Poet on the Piano

    Love the atmosphere here, you make it cozy yet provide imagery that sounds beautiful and calming. Great word usage for such a short write, I liked the "ecstasy climbing" and "sultry eyes". Simple but full of feeling. Keep it up :)

  • 12 years ago

    by Melpomene

    I like the opening, the word 'Darling' really sets the tone of voice. You know it's going to be quite the soft sensual tone throughout and I quite enjoyed how you managed to set that all with one word. Nice job.

    Mr.Romantic had a playful touch to it, almost teasing. I felt like you were being a little sweetly sarcastic here which I had to smile at.

    Enjoyed some of your word choice, they set the mood. 'Sultry', 'kindling' 'satin', these were all words that really played with my senses.

    This is the first time I've read your work and it has been a pleasure, look forward to checking some more out in the near future.

    -Mel

  • 12 years ago

    by Britt

    This poem reminds me of the song "all I can think about... is gettin' you home". It's a country song, lol. I can't think of the title, it's totally escaping my mind. But it talked of candlelight etc. :)

    I love the use of kindling, the beginning of the fire, passion, flame. And then paired with "flame flickers", what a fun play on the tongue, I really enjoyed that part.

    The ending really just oozes passion. I adore this little gem!

  • A wonderful piece filled with passion and iamgery. Nice work! 5/5

  • 12 years ago

    by Mohan

    Lovely lines

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