by Jack Nightengale Aug 5, 2012
category :
Sadness, depression /
about death
24 is the number of hours in a day, |
by Aubrey
You better not go anywhere Mister...because I am right here Waiting for u: ) |
Good piece. I like the rhyming way, except for the last two lines which donot rhyme. I suggest you improve the one before the last, ending with 'eyes'. For example |
Thanks for the comment but cancer is a pain in the but and its not about suicide, I'm just letting go of everything. Thanks for the comment although you think its about suicide. |
by X Harlea X
Interesting piece, little suicidal, but it's good. Very powerful. Good job. ((5)) |