The skin I'm in

by Chelsey   Aug 6, 2012


Let's speak hypothetically for once
After all, shouldn't poets write that way?
Digging deeper, construing thoughts
that may or may not have come to reality

Jump into my skin for a day,
and tell me if your 'breath of fresh air'
contains forgiveness and trust
And let me be you for a night
so I can change your actions,
while you reword my response

You won't have to ask how I feel
or wonder if I think of you often...
I do
Instead, you'll feel my blood pressure
escalating
You'll know I don't seek pity and that
my heart pulpitations are real

They'll say don't use words like
annoyed, frustrated, irritated
Yet, you'll find the simplest words
are what defines my mind

Step into my skin and see
that forgiveness is not there
because that step has been taken
I'm now stuck finding the answers
of where to go from here.

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  • 12 years ago

    by One Man Clan

    Now what I admire the most here is your ability to speak to your readers while voicing your thoughts in almost every poem, That aint easy, takes both skill and practice and I personally try to do it as well, but not where near as good.

    you've done a spectacular job here chels
    and the fact that you ended the poem with a note of despair sent chills down my spine
    5/5 and a winner in my book
    I'd nominate this if i could.

  • 12 years ago

    by Darren

    Nice flow, nice slower pace to reflect the hurt. There is great emotion in this.

    It is very precise without any sign of over complicating.

    nice write.

  • 12 years ago

    by The Poet Behind The Poems

    This poem simple but really pure in emotion I love the word choice and the flow was also good very nicely written :)

    5/5

  • 12 years ago

    by Tara Kay

    :O WOW Chelsey, I am speechless, this piece completely tore me apart, the language was simple but actually was the best I have read from you, I think it holds so much meaning and that's why I love it so much :)

    AMAZING WORK CHELSEY, You are such a great writer, and you make me totally lose my mind when reading your work

    :) love ya

  • 12 years ago

    by Meme

    @_@ Chels *huuuuuugggggsssssss youuuuu*

    The language you used in this piece is so simple and direct and just heartfelt. I loved how you started it by hypothesizing, and the idea of jumping into someones skin; to try and understand how they feel or respond to things, thats just so deep.

    Then you you left me SHOCKED in your last verse, where forgiveness step has been taken, and you just waiting not knowing where to go from there.

    Ooohhhh Chels, Sigh!
    This goes straight to my favs... <3

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