I've noticed that now days, parents try to buy their children's love with toys and clothes, etc. All children really want is love and attention and most act like it's too much. It makes me so mad because like in this story, they are missing something huge in their child's life... abuse.

The only thing I see wrong is there is a typo in the 5th stanza, 2nd line "holday" should be "holiday".

Overall, you captured a lot of emotion from the point of view of a abused little girl, absolutely breaks my heart to know that so many are done this way...and it could be prevented if their parents just paid attention.

This is heart braking you really captured the emotion and pain I have to say it got to me ... This shows your talent I really liked the last two stanzas it total blew me away :)

This is heartbreaking, Saffie. You always pen with such pure and raw emotion, it's just overwhelming. I know you write mostly from personal experiences.. I hope all's well. Keep writing!