Amazing! I really liked this one, beautiful writting style, and i love the repeat of the first 4lines at the end. It really made your point. " i swear i tell in love with the devil tonight" love it :)

You write amazingly, I loved this. A powerful piece 5/5 hun.

For being so young you have picked up on poetry really well. I am not fond of rhyming poems per se but it works well with this poem. Keep writing and challenge yourself. You definitely have a talent now build on your life experiences. Well done.

Really great , liked the descriptions

I like the way this poem started, I mean it went straight towards giving a description and to set a scene. I thought you did very well with the imaginary, I also liked that you used the color red in her dress as the red often times symbolizes passion and it seems that this lady had a lot of that...

I also liked the title, it is catchy. It grabbed my attention and it also fits the content of the poem. What stayed the most in my mind was the part where she said that she would be your wife but she soon left your life.. that part was sad because it must have meant a lot to you. And a heartbreak soon came. :(
hence, that's the reason why I believe the title came from.

I also noticed that you implemented rhymes, Well done,

A fraudster, makes no haste to bless. Counterfeitism, demands rush.

I really felt the intensity of the seduction of the woman you described in this poem. I like how it started, I could envision the woman straight away. And I like how you repeated the first couple of lines at the end. It was a great cyclical structure.

The title was interesting, and I like the idea of falling in love with the devil, because we all make the mistake of falling for someone who isn't right for us sometimes. The topic reminded me of a poem I wrote.. I think it's called Monster.

Great job!

You have a love for your trademark right; brown skin? How adorable. Back to your piece, hhhmm! a catchy title I must say. A very captivating start, gets one engaged for eventual scenarios. You did a good job with your descriptions, one can get to know about this damsel 'devil'. Great effort with that and also ending the poem with your intro., gave it a good approach.

Don't we all love to be inlove with badboy or girl at times. It just overwhelms and challenges your being to date such. It gives a different feel with the reality of it, though at times when lucky its not as bad as it is been regarded with them 'devils'. They're quiet good and harmless as per attitude.

Good and different love poem. ..

I agree with PinkyPrincess on the cyclical structure, it was done very well. I love the intense feelings that this poem invokes both the sexualised lust and the growing knowledge of the reality of the situation. During the poem I felt trapped with the author, pulled in. A poem has to be really good for me to feel one with the authors emotions and thoughts. Well done.

I love it... especialy how the last 4 lines repate the first 4...

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Dude, this has a touch of brilliance!

I like the seductive imagery, the rhyming almost seems cheeky and flirtatious...

I also liked that you portrayed the female as being the devil...
Its usually the male that's branded evil in the one night stand relationship.
As a spices we love, hate and use with discretion equally...
Especially when it come to sex... Misleading lust for love and forever is just... Well, less than twenty-four hours.
Enjoyable read :)