Wow, what a powerful poem, MA!

"Someday, little girl, carry me
a sack full of photographs,
and tell me if you've found

the answer yet."

That ending just gets me, I love the imagery here and can picture this so perfectly. It really gave an awe/sad factor at the end with this breathtaking stanza. What a perfect ending.

I stumbled over this part and think maybe you have a typo or forgot to add a word

"would be better, perhaps,
they no one showing up
to take you home"

I've read it a few different times and can't make sense of it lol.

"but others don't have expectations
worth risking more breaths on."

Love this. I love how it stuck out with different structure than the rest of the piece, and I love the wisdom here. So much truth!

Brilliant poem!

This was a really great story Id love to know your inspiration(pm please lol) as my main poetry is narration piece that tell a story you nailed it

I do agree with britt the end got me I could play it all in my head such a deep write.

Lies could be like that
loud bird you cross whilst
traveling home, telling you
you aren't that lonely,
but that you're far
far away....

I just loved this every time I hear the bird now
I will think of this poem

Overall this poem had everything it needed I have to say it seems diffrent to your normal style from what
I've read but ,

It was amazing 5/5