Oh dear,ur poem...so full of love..n emotions!!
great work..
keep writing.
looking forward to more of ur poems!
*_*

Yours is already nice...i need not help u improve dear!!

You know bubble
u have the potential to be a good writer..
your poem was nice, for it makes every reader to dream.. i love the way it written. wish you good luck!!
keep making on poems..

You know bubble
u have the potential to be a good writer..
you poem was nice, for it makes every reader to dream.. i love the way it written. wish you good luck!!
keep making on poems..

Answers found, come from what we seek. Love is a seed, it grows with time.

U knw sum terms r realy gud..like 'speechless scream'.
Then ,d second half of d poem has much strong emotions..coz as d reader reads more, needs more..
Overal, a gud piece.
U hv gud poetic skils..d only thing is u need to structure uor poem well..