Sweet to sour

by Krysten   Aug 10, 2012


I hear those sweet words you say,
dripping with sugar coated promises.
A lollipop of layered lies.

How many licks does it take to get to the center
for the sour truth to spoil the fantasy I've built for myself.
I know you can not be believed, you are the candyman

All sweet words, delicious lies. I gobbel them up
and lay in your arms temporarly content.
I dont even complain when the sweet turns to sour
in the pit of my stomache.

I just let you ease the doubt with
more sugar coated promises,
and drift to sleep with
sugar coated nightmares dancing in my head.

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  • 12 years ago

    by BlueJay

    I love your descriptions and how you twist the wonderful to the horrible so elegantly. Your style was excellent and your flow as well. The word choice seemed perfect and your voice was shown in wondrous ways. 10/10 on your creativity and 100/100 on the poem itself, oh wait I can't give it that. Aww.

    Well done.

  • 12 years ago

    by TSI25

    "With sugar coated nightmares dancing in my head"

    love it. definitely a perfect ending, and probably the best thing ive read by you yet. the imagery here is amazing, the flow is soothing but at the same time, paranoia inducing, its clear something is covertly wrong. very very good all around.

  • 12 years ago

    by Forever Broken

    Your descriptions are impecable! you have a lot of talent. I'm glad you commented on my poems. Now I have another persons work to follow :)

  • 12 years ago

    by Forever Broken

    Your descriptions are impecable! you have a lot of talent. I'm glad you commented on my poems. Now I have another persons work to follow :)

  • 12 years ago

    by Aaron

    Yet, another poem you have written that I can connect with. There wasn't one part I like more than the rest I suppose. We know the sweet lies usually turn to sour truths and yet we still listen...good piece.