I see alot of good things in this poem.
I really like how you use sugar coated candy to describe the lies the man is telling you and how you eat the lies up like candy. Being a sugar addict myself I can relate. :)
There are some mis-spellings which are minor complaints and easily fixed. I stress editing in almost every poem I review simply because as poets we tend to over use words to convey an expression or feeling. Too many unecessary words make the poem tedious to the reader and the poem loses all power. So edit, edit and edit some more.
Take out anything that seems to not work with the message. You have a genuine talent you just have to learn how to make the words work for you and not against what you are trying to say.

I like how you describe the lollipop and how many licks does it take to get to the center...
that was creative.

I was picturing a rockaleta, I think that lollipop has all type of flavors even sour. and spicy.. ohhh. I want one..

but to think about it, I don't think you were talking about a rockaleta since you are just using sweet and sour. But true, I don't want sugar coated words neither, either they are sweet because that's how they are or nothing. Nice poem

Just a tidbit of information, the first line of the second stanza reminded me of the commercial about 'How many licks does it take to get to the center of a tootsie pop.' I had to smile at that, and I'm sorry if that offended you...just thought that I would share :)

'I hear those sweet words you say,
dripping with sugar coated promises.
A lollipop of layered lies.'

^ I like how you are using candy in this poem. I haven't yet read a poem that involved candy, so I thought that it was interesting how you managed to make it into a dark poem. Very interesting as well :) I like it.

How many licks does it take to get to the center
for the sour truth to spoil the fantasy I've built for myself.
I know you can not be believed, you are the candyman

^ I would put a question mark at the end of the second line here, because you are asking a question, aren't you? You might not be, but the way you worded it made me think that you were.

All sweet words, delicious lies. I gobbel them up
and lay in your arms temporarly content.
I dont even complain when the sweet turns to sour
in the pit of my stomache.

^ Quite a few fixer uppers are needed. First line, 'gobbel' should be 'gobble.' Second line, 'temporarly' should be 'temporarily.' I would put an apostrophe in dont in the third line. For the fourth, 'stomache' should be 'stomach'

I just let you ease the doubt with
more sugar coated promises,
and drift to sleep with
sugar coated nightmares dancing in my head.

^ Beautiful imagery :)

Like I said, I am impressed. I really like this idea because it is different from other works that I have read. I love it.

Excellent
5/5

~S

Yet, another poem you have written that I can connect with. There wasn't one part I like more than the rest I suppose. We know the sweet lies usually turn to sour truths and yet we still listen...good piece.

Your descriptions are impecable! you have a lot of talent. I'm glad you commented on my poems. Now I have another persons work to follow :)

Your descriptions are impecable! you have a lot of talent. I'm glad you commented on my poems. Now I have another persons work to follow :)

"With sugar coated nightmares dancing in my head"

love it. definitely a perfect ending, and probably the best thing ive read by you yet. the imagery here is amazing, the flow is soothing but at the same time, paranoia inducing, its clear something is covertly wrong. very very good all around.

I love your descriptions and how you twist the wonderful to the horrible so elegantly. Your style was excellent and your flow as well. The word choice seemed perfect and your voice was shown in wondrous ways. 10/10 on your creativity and 100/100 on the poem itself, oh wait I can't give it that. Aww.

Well done.