"Valley of unrest" is profound... I like how you leave the reader with this phrase and how it is the title as well.

My only suggestions:

"The day it rushes by"
- Comma after "day"?

"With the sun &all your tears"
- Liked the mixture of sun and tears here, it was unique and abstract as I usually don't think of them so close together.

Neat write, you have a fresh style and I enjoy your brevity the more I read it!! Take care.

Firstly, critiques:

'Eatin' - not sure if it's meant to be 'eaten' or 'eating' - both could work, but definitely needs to fixed to save later confusion.

'seams' - should be 'seems'

'The day it rushes by' - needs a comma after 'day'; there needs to be a pause there for that statement to have the intended impact.

Likes;

'Welcoming the darkness
&Her moon with silver beams'

^^ I love these two lines.
They flow really smoothly, and there is such great imagery there.

My only complaints;
It was just too short! But it was to the point and I enjoyed it.