Ooh! I like this piece.

It's a fiery piece. Shows your strength.

I like how you have given 'independence' a capital letter. Though unnecessary, you have given it a persona of sorts I suppose. Given it more definition, more importance by this kind of use.

My suggestions:

last stanza;
'In my possession' - the 'in' shouldn't have a capital.

We should all stand up for what we believe in and what we want. It's our life, and only we can orchestrate it. No one else has that power, unless we give it to them that is.
In this piece, it seems you have regained your independence, regained your control and are now moving forward.

There is a lot of strength and maturity behind this piece. 5/5

Ooh! I like this piece.

It's a fiery piece. Shows your strength.

I like how you have given 'independence' a capital letter. Though unnecessary, you have given it a persona of sorts I suppose. Given it more definition, more importance by this kind of use.

My suggestions:

last stanza;
'In my possession' - the 'in' shouldn't have a capital.

We should all stand up for what we believe in and what we want. It's our life, and only we can orchestrate it. No one else has that power, unless we give it to them that is.
In this piece, it seems you have regained your independence, regained your control and are now moving forward.

There is a lot of strength and maturity behind this piece. 5/5